Victoria analyzes the love...and hate

Victoria analyzes the love...and hate

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The beginning of the end

The premise of the story isn’t terrible but I feel it could be improved greatly. Love and hate don’t seem to be introduced here very well. Because of the lack of theme, this story breaks the cohesion created by the other three. Although  I enjoy the premise this story appears to be almost exactly like so many young adult books being written. In order to make this story more original an element should be added that is unique from stories of this nature.

Chapter 1

I like how this story is written. Although it is short, the language used makes me want to continue reading. It will be interesting to see how this translates into video games. In order to more easily translate this story the setting should be elaborated on more.

Chapter One – Beginning

Jordans story has a very interesting premise. I have never really seen any stories that really relate to this one. The way it is written is very good but I would like to learn more about the main character. His story will continue to be interesting as long as his character creates a strong “bond” with the word he is studying.